User blog comment:Sylveon13/M PERSONAL OC./@comment-35454779-20180415040001

This comment is bound to come off as rude. If you don't want to read rude comments, or you can't mentally handle the slightest bit of criticism, please don't read this. Deleting this is pretty childish as well, so please avoid that as well. You can yell at me all you want about how I'm wrong, I guess, but I won't listen. Just a warning before I completely ruin your self esteem.

There's a lot of things I see wrong with this character.

First off, Trainers have a limit of six Pokemon on their teams. You have nine. That's an obvious overpowered/mary sue trait.

Secondly, "Cute" as a personality doesn't work. You can't have a "cute" personality. That's a trait. And it's also another mary sue alert.

Thirdly, the whole personality itself doesn't work. At least describe her a little! I don't just put "Evil, mean, rude, tricks people" as my character Gianna's personality, do I? No. I describe it, because otherwise it makes no sense.

Fourthly, the fact that you used an already existing anime character and made it "Your OC". OC stands for "Original Character", not "Character Ripped Off Of An Anime". Than would be CROAA, Not OC. At least make it like, a picture of a certain trainer class like a Beauty or Dancer or something.

Fifthly, There's no reasoning for anything here. Why did she move to Kalos? Why does she dislike rain? Why does she have/like the Pokemon she has? What's her backstory? There's nothing here to make this character a good character, or as I like to call it a "3-D" character. This is considered a "Flat" or "2-D" character, since it has literally no depth and things just happen because they happen. Everything has a reason for happening, and if you want your character to be a good, well-written and easily memorable character you need to add depth.

Sixthly, as I've mentioned a few times before, this is an obvious Mary Sue character. This means that the character is basically perfect in every way. Not in a good way, as in the character is a good character. But in a bad way like it's so perfect, flawless and stuff that it's boring. Remember what I said about depth. Without depth, characters like this are very forgettable, boring and just seen as very poorly written and underdeveloped.

Overall, this character is just bad. It's very forgettable, mary sue-ish, unoriginal and has no depth or background at all. Please fix all of this. Thank you.

If it makes you feel better after I just completely dissed your character, I can always help you improve your character creating. Just tell me and I'll see what I can do.

Your local sad Hex Maniac, Myself